[转载]【暖歌“The Warm Tune”】旧作“馨”译

     前几天看到译友们翻译登山题材的诗，于是想起08年初写的这一首。今天有空，试着把它译成英语。因为原诗是现代自由诗，所以我没有太刻意于它的韵脚，不过还是费心把它弄成了有规整节奏的“扬抑格”诗行。（“音步”和“节奏”的析分附后） 所以读起来感觉似乎还不错。

暖 歌 The Warm Tune

  宁馨儿/诗  by Petite (Ning Hsin-erh)

冬日艳阳下，漫步在

人迹罕至的山间

常青树般默然伫立

长望阡陌，耐心等候

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Roaming in the uninhabit’d hills

basking in the gorgeous wintry sun,

still as evergreen, silent, I gazed far  

at zigzag trails,waiting for revoir.

瘦薄的枯草和落叶

铺满柔缓的山坡

干爽，柔软，愉悦

覆盖着思绪的沃土

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Withered grass and leaves so thin and sparse,

spred the gentle, rippling slopes,

supple, soft and coolish, pleasing   

to the eye, a mantle of budding feelings.

松针葱郁，点缀荒林

山雀叽叽喳喳

轻盈，穿梭，飞舞

午后的暖阳灿灿

烘热了耳鬓

烘艳了脸颊

照亮惊奇的双眸

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Lush pines strewed the desolate woods,

with the sparrows chatter, flutter,

dart and dance above the skies.

brilliant were the sun rays;

blazing ears and temples,

blushing faces and cheeks

adding light to eyes surprised.

疏枝间，山果累累

微风中裸露，颤舞

甜酸，清馨 

填满成熟的喧闹

沉甸甸的让枝条纤弱

逗引寻寻觅觅

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Light twigs clustered with fruits wild,  

naked,quiv’ring in breeze mild,

fresh and sour, sweet and scented,

crammed with glamors ripe and loud;

much too laden, boughs so tender,

tempting seek and search in bewilderment.

是谁，在纵情吟唱？

喧响，在静幽的深谷回荡

歌声一节节地升腾

再缓缓落下

如暖阳，投射进

波光粼粼的心湖

折射出绵长的幽影

澄澈里，不经意间

凝定，幻化成永恒

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Hark! Who burst out singing,

brought the vale serene resounding,

higher and higher it rose,

slowly, slowly then descending,

casting quiet long reflections

onto rippling hearts projected,

crystallized, and made enduring in mind.

（宁馨儿 2008-01-18 原诗链接: http://1fragrance.blog.sohu.com/79702332.html）

“音步和节拍”析分如下：

Roam-ing /in the /un-in-/hab-it’d /hills

bask-ing /in the/gor-geous/ win-try /sun,

still as/ ever-green, /si-lent, /I gazed / far  

at zig-/zag trails,/ wait-ing / for re-/voir.

With-ered/ grass and/ leaves so/ thin and/ sparse,

spred the/ gen-tle,/ rip-pling / slopes,

sup-ple, / soft and /cool-ish, / pleas-ing   

to the/ eye, a /man-tle of / budd-ing/ feel-ings.

Lush pines/ strewed the /des-o-/late woods,

with the /spar-rows /chat-ter, / flut-ter,

dart and /dance a-/bove the /skies.

bril-liant /were the/sun rays;

blazing/ ears and /tem-ples,

blush-ing / fac-es and /cheeks

add-ing / light to/ eyes sur-/prised.

Light twigs /clus-tered /with fruits / wild,  

na-ked,/ quiv’r-ing/ in breeze/ mild,

fresh and /sour,^ /sweet and /scent-ed,

crammed with /glam-ors / ripe and /loud;

much too /lad-en, / boughs so / ten-der,

tempt-ing/ seek and /search in be-/wil-der-ment.

Hark! /Who ^ / burst out /sing-ing,

brought the /vale se-/rene re-/sound-ing,

high-er and /high-er / it rose,

slow-ly, /slowly/ then de-/scend-ing,

cast-ing/ qui-et / long re-/flec-tions

on-to/ rippl-ing/ hearts pro-/ject-ed,

crys-tal-/lized, and/ made en-/during in / mind.